Well written poem, Julia. It's a rollercoaster to read. And I think I need to read it a couple more times to better understand it. Then again, the rollercoaster might very well be what lasts.
Arjan! Thank you. I have been thinking on re-working it, as I know it gets a bit scattered there with the take-in on the last stanza. However, that is the intended trajectory of energy and part of why the conclusion is what it is. Been wondering how the structure there supports or doesn't support it, though.
The reference to Robert Frost? I suppose I hoped that was obvious and that the original ending to that line and the original meaning of it would echo in the minds of the readers. I am not sure how one would even give credit, especially as it isn't even the entire line. How have you seen that done successfully on the page before? Open to suggestions to make an edit!
The original meaning does echo nicely there. I don't know of any formal way of doing it on this platform. I'll publish an older poem of mine from January and you can see how I did it. One day someone may well put "The moss between our toes" in their poem and you would deserve a nod.
I suppose wouldn't mind, and I'm sure it'll be said without knowing I said it once. Anyway, thank you, I look forward to seeing your January piece and I am glad to you said hello and I've gotten a chance to encounter and follow your work!
Well written poem, Julia. It's a rollercoaster to read. And I think I need to read it a couple more times to better understand it. Then again, the rollercoaster might very well be what lasts.
Arjan! Thank you. I have been thinking on re-working it, as I know it gets a bit scattered there with the take-in on the last stanza. However, that is the intended trajectory of energy and part of why the conclusion is what it is. Been wondering how the structure there supports or doesn't support it, though.
I did enjoy this poem. I do think you should always give credit to another poet if you use a line of theirs. A bunch of good images throughout.
The reference to Robert Frost? I suppose I hoped that was obvious and that the original ending to that line and the original meaning of it would echo in the minds of the readers. I am not sure how one would even give credit, especially as it isn't even the entire line. How have you seen that done successfully on the page before? Open to suggestions to make an edit!
The original meaning does echo nicely there. I don't know of any formal way of doing it on this platform. I'll publish an older poem of mine from January and you can see how I did it. One day someone may well put "The moss between our toes" in their poem and you would deserve a nod.
I suppose wouldn't mind, and I'm sure it'll be said without knowing I said it once. Anyway, thank you, I look forward to seeing your January piece and I am glad to you said hello and I've gotten a chance to encounter and follow your work!